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In the face of bitterness
  I have mastered sweetness.
   By the end of this day I will have calculated
  exact measurements of cream
  to wipe clean the face of gravestones.

I will have learned to soothe the aching
    of windswept hearts,
       to break open on my part
      like a shell of chocolate
    quivering open, full of cream.
  I will have learned to love grief
     as dearly as my own dream.

At the end of my childhood -my dream-
         of owning a candy store:
      a sweet shop, a bakery….
        specializing in the art of the glazed.
     The wedding cakes, the brick tarts,
memory of a birthday, of candles, happy catering
for happy occasions of all kinds…
                 -my dream-
will grow up with time,
and like the end of the day, seeing the look on my parents' face,
feeling the clutch of my big brother's hand
I will know:
-the childlike shame-
                     to have a better chance at happiness.

My dream will transform
-through grief,
it will change
under the rain, under
wind walking through cypress
trees, it will
become something new.

Cleaner, realistic-er, the kind of thing
Mom secretly celebrates in a dream
as she sleeps the day away, plagued
by financial worries.
The candy Gran gave me (this grave of me)
melting its sweetness into my hands.

My hands will smell like lemons and syrup
all through my natural life.
Everything I touch will sweeten, sticky
itself in the light.

Grief transforms (into fruited blooms, heavy
dew, linen sheets, the clothes
blowing fresh in the wind. White as sugar, crust
with sunlight). Sweetness, such sweetness,
will enter me like a prayer.
I'll turn to candy in the light, my hands
become that of a sugary, raw
entity.

I will open the doors of my shop.
   I will invite the lovely children in,
       the lonely wives and widowed fathers,
           as well. I'll tell
the grandparents not to hang back, come in,
   have a snack, sit on down, take a plate
        would you like cream or chocolate cake?

Because—
     in the face of such silence,
  I have my baking oven.

       I have my taffy-maker, my bubbling pans
   of dulce de leche. I have a family wrought
       of a sickening-silence, a brother
       made of stone, a mother
       
         —like candy glass.

I'll have speeches, some sermons,
I'll have my hearty attempts to cheer them up,
I'll have frustrations

ending like songs at the end of a record,
         breaking me down like sugars in stomach acid,
                 turning to glass and candy crystal.

I'll have delicate,
I'll have fragile,
I'll have an unbroken
   love in my hands,
         I'll have love,
            I'll be love.

Grief has created something.
               In me, a world,
              at once real and illusionary,
                 standing in the face of bitterness
                      -and having mastered sweetness-
              it breaks open like a candy shell
revealing the hardened core of love:

                                       a single sun/son of hard candy.
From my poetry writing class. The exercise was to work on a piece with repetition. I tried to vary the types of repetition I used. I guess it turned out successfully. Someone commented, "Candy-maker or Undertaker" on this piece. That sounds like a good name for a poem.
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Candy at a Funeral by ~TheGlassIris is a poem that intertwines grief and candy in a way that feel natural and beautiful. ( Suggested by 0hgravity and Featured by thorns )
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appocrea Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's a daily dev, everybody loves it and then noby comments on it for almost a year :facepalm: Beautiful writing nevertheless.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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appocrea Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
np ^.^
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appocrea Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
nobody*
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Boogieman900 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I quite enjoyed this piece, the use of repetition didn't interfere with the flow of the poem, and it didn't feel like it was forced into position. Very well written.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013   General Artist
There is so much awesomeness in this piece.

I will have learned to soothe the aching
of windswept hearts,
to break open on my part
like a shell of chocolate
quivering open, full of cream.
I will have learned to love grief
as dearly as my own dream.


^This. :heart:

I know this is late, but still, kindly allow me to congratulate you on the well deserved DD, dear heart! :clap:
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. It's very kind of you to notice.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013   General Artist
You are so very welcome, splendid sir! :huggle:
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dynamicability Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
How sweet!!! :love:
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studio91 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Very creative and sweet. I like it!
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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studio91 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
you're welcome!
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TommySixxx Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
rippling and fresh
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a lot.
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TommySixxx Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Welcome! I look forward to reading more of your work
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Obese-Butterfly Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Beautiful. Just..the title...the poem itself...speechless.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Incredible work.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome.
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Dylexa Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Very beautiful!
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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Dylexa Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
Yup!
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Skywalker0007 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Sweets and death, you made it come together, beautiful.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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InkDrawnDreamer Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
This is a truly lovely poem. (It's a bit nostalgic for me actually because when my aunt died, she had actually requested having sweets at her service. It made us all feel a lot better) The way you've written it is really uplifting and meaningful. Please, keep it up :)
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. The piece is based off of my own grandmother's funeral. The story is completely different but I remember relatives giving me candy for some reason. I wasn't even that young.
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InkDrawnDreamer Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student General Artist
Really? Huh, that's interesting considering you weren't that young. I wonder why?

You're quite welcome ^^
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woot4anime64 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, how beautiful. So optimistic to mix death with sweets. Very well done ^_^
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I always did love eating, though not so much at a cold house.
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woot4anime64 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student General Artist
I like eating too What is a cold house?
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:icontheglassiris:
TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A house that's got a low temperature. It's what it says on the tin.
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woot4anime64 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student General Artist
oh...I'm a little dumb sometimes...
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Wolf-Rizer Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great Poem.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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iamtysha Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well deserved DD. :)
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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iamtysha Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course. :)
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Awesome work.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
hey, congratulations! this is a lovely piece and a well deserved feature.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks a lot. It's my first. Definitely feel like I've come a way off from the first piece you've ever critiqued for me. And thank you for taking the time.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
It seems like you have. I still owe you some critiques. Sorry it's taken so long. :)
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
S'okay. Take your time.
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AngelheartTheWarrior Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well deserved DD!

I don't think anyone aside from you could combine grief and candy, because nobody grieves over candy but the way you did it is amazing.
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Nobody grieves over candy", excuse me, have you ever dropped a lollipop in mud before? Never seen a greater tragedy. And if Shakespeare had made Hamlet's dying words accidentally shatter a window and send a pot of melting chocolate to the floor, I'd probably have dehydrated my eyes reading the text.

But thank you.
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AngelheartTheWarrior Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
... I wish I could edit comments, once again. ._. No prob. :)
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